Those of you following @nestpitch and/or this blog already know that today Nik Vukoja and I are posting a small selection of 35-word pitches for critique as part of our Post-It-Forward concept, to help perfect a winning 35-word pitch.
Sadly, we ended up with not a single NA or MG pitch, but we have several YA, a few Adult, and one PB. While every story is different, a winning pitch, though hard to define, is easy to spot. We hope that by providing direct feedback to the pitches below, everyone involved will gain some insight into what makes a “perfect pitch”.
Sometimes, seeing or reading something makes magic happen for the reader also, a light-bulb moment. If anyone gets such a moment, please feel free to share.
Nothing is more contagious than enthusiasm – the more you spread, the more you have.
So how will this work?
Read the pitches either here or on the Nestpitch blog:
Choose as many pitches as you want to read and comment on. All comments will be monitored and approved to make sure the feedback is constructive and helpful, not destructive or hurtful.
We’ve provided examples below. Please make sure to post the Pitch Number at the beginning of your comment.
Read the pitches, and write the comments as per examples below. Please post a new comment for each Pitch Number, it’ll make it easier for the author to locate the feedback. If in doubt, you’ll find my comments are below also.
R- (Number) I liked the premise but I thought…
R- (Number) it’s a great idea but can you put the MC’s name in there somewhere?
R-1 Genre: YA Mystery
When Lucie’s father gives her an antique family jewellery box, and she discovers a mysterious letter addressed to her concealed within, she soon realises she is the only one who can uncover her ancestor’s secrets.
R-2 Genre: YA Urban Fantasy
When a legion of undead revenants attacks, troubled necromancer Desdemona must descend into London’s shadowed cemeteries to prevent the rise of the Exorcist and keep the balance between Life and Death from shattering.
R-3 Genre: Adult Contemporary Romance
Buried tensions erupt when Juliet reconnects with her first love after twenty-five years. Alternating between past and present, this adult romance tells the bittersweet stories of their star-crossed teen courtship and their newly unfolding liaison.
R-4 Genre: Adult Urban Fantasy
Sparky Voltaire fights PTSD and, just when he’s winning, knee-high monsters attack. He carjacks a beautiful blonde and his world explodes with witches, were-rats, televangelists and wannabe vamps.
R-5 Genre: Adult Suspense Thriller
The Information Retrieval Unit (IRU) has generated a way to retrieve the memories of crime witnesses, which seems like a great idea, until one man’s memories will force the creator of the IRU into hiding.
R-6 Genre YA High Fantasy
Kidnapped as a baby, 15-year-old Raine struggles to fit in with her family. When she learns she has dark magic, banishment and murder attempts begin. Now she must discover the attacker’s identity before someone’s killed.
Now it’s up to you! We’ll have these posts open for comments from March 22nd March 29th. Help our brave pitchers out by leaving a helpful comment or two!
Don’t forget #nestpitch submission window will be open 1st April and #LV14 on April 4th